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20 April 2008 @ 11:09 pm
Fic, Lost: The Devil's Right Hand (ensemble), PG13, for lostsquee  
Title: The Devil's Right Hand
Rating: PG13
Characters: Danielle, Kate, Sawyer, Boone, Charlie, Shannon, Michael, Locke, Jack, Juliet, Sayid
Word counting: 1100.
Disclaimer: Lost is not mine, even if all of this stuff happened ;)
Spoilers: Up to The Other Woman.
Summary: Eleven guns-related drabbles.
A/N: For the picture prompt, day 7, at lostsquee (the pic with the gun). This is one of the weirdest things I've ever done and I still think I'm not any good at drabbles but it wanted to go like this *shrugs*. Blame Steve Earle and Johnny Cash for the title. I really should stop listening to music at the gym.

The trial was in the morning and they drug me out of bed
Asked me how I pleaded, not guilty I said
Not guilty I said, you've got the wrong man
Nothing touched the trigger but the devil's right hand.

The Devil's Right Hand, Steve Earle


Robert’s face is covered in blood, dripping down from his nose; he doesn’t notice.

He is here but he’s also somewhere else. He doesn’t know her, he doesn’t know when they are.

One hour ago, it was the day she told him she was pregnant. Ten minutes ago, it was the day they crashed.

His gun is heavy in her hands, the firing pin removed; he doesn’t notice it.

Then he suddenly is there, looking straight at her; she can recognize him only from his eyes. The rest, it’s not him.

Je te prie, Danielle.

She aims at the head.


She hadn’t planned on this, but it’s the only way.

She doesn’t want anyone hurt and she means it, but if shooting Jason is the only way to prevent something worse, fine. Kate really doesn’t have a choice.

She’s fast; she grabs the gun, pulls the trigger twice and they are on the ground. But they’re going to live, so that’s as fine as it gets.

The gun is light in her hands; everything happened so fast that she really hasn’t almost noticed the sequence of events. But it isn’t important.

What’s important, is to get what she came for.


Duckett’s words die with him and Sawyer’s hands shake.

Rain is pouring, fast and hard and he’s chilled to the bone.

His lips move but no sounds comes out. He crashes on his knees, clothes soaking wet; the gun in his hand looks almost menacing.

The thin, frail paper of the letter is slippery between his fingers and he wants to throw up.

He mouths a sorry which isn’t of any use; he really has fucked up, this time.

He’s in trouble and it’s a damn sorry one. But that gun that put him there, it won’t get him out.


He won’t ever say it, but he’s glad that Kate has that gun. It was necessary that someone had it but Boone has to let Shannon win on this one.

He hates guns and alright, he never had one his whole life and sure, he went to marches. What about it?

He knows how one works, sure, but that didn’t mean he hadn’t felt a chill running down his spine the second he took it. He can still feel his palm sweating.

No, guns aren’t really his thing. He still wants to help; means he’s going to find another way.


Charlie has never fired a gun in his whole life, but that really isn’t the point.

He sees Jack dropping the gun. That’s all he needs.

It’s wet and cold and slippery; his fingers close tightly around the handle and it doesn’t fall.

Jack is holding him to the ground. It’s now or never.

His neck aches and he feels like he’s going to suffocate. It isn’t time. Claire screams and he pulls the trigger.

One, two, three, four, five, six.

Then there aren’t any more bullets and Ethan is dead.

The gun falls to the ground. He isn’t sorry.


Shannon’s hand shakes. She can’t see right. More because she’s crying than because it’s raining.

It was an accident.

She doesn’t believe it. It wasn’t, he’s gone, Locke showed up with Boone’s blood on his shirt.

He might have died a hero; she couldn’t care less.

It’s the first time she ever aims a gun.

A flash comes. He’s sixteen, his shirt has a peace symbol on it, he’s tired, Sabrina is outside her room telling him that going to marches is something that a well-adjusted person doesn’t do and it aches.

Firing comes easy, but it’s all for nothing.


I’m sorry.

He pulls on the trigger and closes his eyes for a second.

When he opens them again, she’s on the couch, a bullet in her waist, her head reclined on her arm.


Walt, forgive me.

There’s a noise on his right, Michael?, and he fires again without even thinking about it.

Libby lies on the ground, blankets not clutched to her chest anymore; he opens the armery door, his fingers shaking so badly. He nods at him.

He aims the gun at his shoulder and fires. In comparison to what he just did, it hurts much less.


Helen would say, don’t forget that you’re always an employee in a box company.

The last time he remembered it, it was when he told Boone.

He can’t think about it. Not now.

The place where his kidney should have been aches. His hand trembles and he should shoot Jack, he’s wrong, he’ll kill them all.

Locke knows, but he’s there and Jack has that phone and even if he could sacrifice that woman to the greater good, he doesn’t find it in himself to fire.

He doesn’t have it in him. He should have learned a long time ago.


He’s a man of science, which means he’s also a man of reason. But when he sees Locke standing there, he decides that reason can be left out for once.

He’s fed up and Naomi is just the last straw.

From Boone to the whole hatch business to the submarine and everything else in between, he’s just fed up and for once he doesn’t think. Jack points the gun in Locke’s face, feeling every nerve ready to snap.

You’re not going to shoot me.

Wanna bet
?, he thinks before firing. Of course the chamber is empty.

Well, now he’s enraged.


Pickett was an obstacle.

She resents shooting him like that, but it was the only way. If he killed Ford, she was never going to leave. She couldn’t have it, not when she was so close.

She realizes that it’s the lowest point she’s ever brought herself to because of Ben.

The gun feels incredibly heavy; Dan is the last person in the world she should point one to. If she fires, this will become the lowest point Ben brought her to.

Juliet lowers the gun; Ben deceived her again and she just had the confirmation.

She’ll never be free.


He crawls over the floor, his shoulder burning. He knows he’s crying; he doesn’t try to stop it.

She lies on the floor, the gun she used to shoot him still between her fingers. He left the one he used on the bed. He thinks he’d do anything in order not to see a gun again.

He was a soldier, shooting someone shouldn’t be so hard. Especially for the greater good.

Right now Sayid couldn’t care less about it.

He always figured it was for everyone’s best that Ben recruited him.

Just this once, he wishes it was someone else.


feeling: weirdweird
on rotation: the devil's right hand - steve earle
Cleo: thinkcleuchi on April 20th, 2008 09:22 pm (UTC)
Wow, that was... hum. I haven't got words to describe it. So powerful, I loved every single word of every single drabble. Sawyer's, Charlie's, Boone's, Shannon's and Sayid's are all my favorites, but I guess that's because I like them more than I like the other characters. And this He’s sixteen, his shirt has a peace symbol on it, he’s tired, Sabrina is outside her room telling him that going to marches is something that a well-adjusted person doesn’t do and it aches. was like the most moving sentence EVER.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost faradayjanie_tangerine on April 20th, 2008 09:25 pm (UTC)
Oh wow now you're flattering me. I think I totally fail at drabbles so now I'm all blushing all the way. And more or less we've got the same favorites, though the Shannon one was the one that I liked better. I'm really so glad you picked that sentence out of all this, it came like that and I'm insanely happy with it. Thank you so much for the awesome feedback, glad you liked this!

bachlavabachlava on April 20th, 2008 09:23 pm (UTC)
OMG, this is beautiful. You've really got the sadness of every situation down - I must say I was particularly impressed by your Danielle voice! But it really felt like I was authentically in each character's head (not something that's easy to accomplish) - Charlie's non-ambivalence, Jack's rage, everything that goes wrong for Sayid... brilliant work.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost sayid/daniellejanie_tangerine on April 20th, 2008 09:27 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! Well, it was my first Danielle. I guess I learned the lesson from the best around ;) I'm really so happy it worked, drabbles are something that clash with my wordy self and I think I fail with them, so that's totally awesome to hear. I'm really so glad you liked it, thank you so much again!

elliotsmelliot: benry vs danielleelliotsmelliot on April 20th, 2008 11:50 pm (UTC)
This was great; very crisp. My favouritea were the Danielle and Boone ones. I like how Danielle treated Robert's sickness with such force. Did she overreact? Who knows? Not everyone can be calm like Sayid in that situation, especially when you are protecting your baby. Boone's made me realize how the guns corrupted everyone else but he eventually resisted. It wasn't him. It wasn't Charlie either but he had too. Same with Michael, same with Juliet, same with everyone but Ana and Sayid who were trained to do this but then, as you noted for Sayid, their training was no good for them in the end. The Shannon section shocked me because I had forgotten how it all arose and how so many times she wanted a gun.

I've had a story in mind to write for a while about where Juliet and possibility Jack learned to use a gun. Maybe after I write the Charlie fanon ones, I'll set my attention back to that.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost rosseau winsjanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 06:00 am (UTC)
Thank you! I sincerely don't know where it came from and why did it want me to become a masochist and drabble it, but if that was good even better ;) maybe she overreacted, maybe she didn't, maybe Robert pulled a very good Minkowski on her. Who knows, poor woman. And no, not everyone has a Sayid patience!

See? He was that good. One day I'll write a fic concerning his going to marches, erm. *nods and sighs* I was also going to do Ana but it didn't want to come together and I ditched it. The Shannon section is one of the ones that came easier. Mh, seems like in that episode she was more or less on the same page as I was ;)

Oh that'd be a great bunny! If you get back on that I'll love to read it. Thank you so much again! ♥
aboutbunnies: all of us are lostaboutbunnies on April 21st, 2008 05:04 am (UTC)
Wow. Incredible. My favorite sections were Danielle's, Sawyer's, and Shannon's. I loved it all, but those particularly pulled at me.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost -> generaljanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 06:02 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I usually am not comfortable around drabbles so it's great to know they worked. I think that Shannon is my favorite, too ;) great to hear that you liked it, thanks again!

falafel_fiction: intense desfalafel_fiction on April 21st, 2008 07:25 am (UTC)
Wow...these are terrific! What a great concept. I loved the way you flashed between all those different shootings. There have been some very cold blooded murders on the show, but I think the ones that you've collected here are more like crimes of passion, drenched in purpose and emotion.

My favourites were Danielles and Shannons. Danielles was especially great since it flashed back to a moment thats only ever been referenced, never seen. In Shannons my heart broke over the image of little Boone in hippy t-shirt after a march that his mother disapproved of. Awww! I also loved the line in Michael's that shooting himself in the arm hurts less than what he did to Ana and Libby.

Keep em coming, girl! I'm loving your work.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost charliejanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 07:36 am (UTC)
Wow, thank you so much! I really thought that I was never going to pull it off when I had the idea so now I'm all squeeing, damn fine way to start the day! These were the ones that came into my head sooner (I only ditched a section which was for Ana but that didn't want to come together) and anyway cold blooded doesn't interest me as much as emotional! ;)

Those two are my favorites, too. The Danielle one was really interesting to do and I had wanted to do something for her for a while, but erm, Shannon has to be my favorite, too. I probably am too fond of the hippie t-shirt for my own good.

Thank you so much, you totally flatter me! ♥
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the female ghost of tom joad: lost -> generaljanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 11:55 am (UTC)
Oh wow, now you really flatter me. I probably should re-thing about my drabbling abilities because I was sure to completely fail the concept *blushes*. I'm really so glad you liked the Kate one, I think I should hire you as my Kate-o-meter or something ♥ ;)

With Juliet I couldn't be merciful and with Locke I went with the most effective perspective ;) your take is much more realistic than mine and it had crossed my mind but then again I didn't remember another moment I could use.

Thank you so much really, I'm overwhelmed. ♥
The ducks in the bathroom are not mine.: Juliet_ToStand6degreesoflea on April 21st, 2008 01:25 pm (UTC)
This is really great, all of it. So short but so strong ;)

I was particularly moved by Rousseau's (She aims at the head.), Sawyer's (But that gun that put him there, it won’t get him out.)& Juliet's (She’ll never be free.).
the female ghost of tom joad: lost julietjanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 08:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! Short but effective was a target I wasn't sure I was going to accomplice so it's great to hear you liked it!

Rosseau was totally one of the best to write out there ;) though I'm satisfied also with the other two you said ;) thanks, glad you liked it!

L: Lost 108neated on April 21st, 2008 02:07 pm (UTC)
That´s a really great idea. I loved the Jack and Juliet ones. Though the Charlie one is great, too.

this will become the lowest point Ben brought her to.

Great and so true. Just so Juliet. I love her.

Hehe while reading I thought the whole time what you´re gonna do with Jack. I totally forgot the Jack/Locke scene. How did that happen. I´ve been waiting for it since "The Greater Good" XD

Anyway´s great work.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost jack **janie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 08:41 pm (UTC)
I totally love Juliet, too. *sigh*

And yeah, I was totally waiting for that from TGG, too. Damn you, Locke, why did you have to be an asshole? *sighs*

Thank you so much, really glad you liked it! ♥
siluria: Lost_Jack blacksiluria on April 21st, 2008 05:44 pm (UTC)
Well done you for writing so many different takes! I've looked at that image and not managed to come up with anything, so 11 is awesome - and awesome they all are too :)
the female ghost of tom joad: lost jack GUHjanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 08:42 pm (UTC)
Thank you! The inspiration actually came because I was listening to that song while watching the picture for the tenth time (I suck at picture prompts, I do) but it was all good ;) thanks so much, glad you liked it! ♥
mkfsdj: Scrubs Lovemrslinus17 on April 21st, 2008 06:24 pm (UTC)
I love the scenes you chose (yeah, there are a lot of gun scenes, arn't there?) I loved Danielle's more than describable.

All just fantastic. Thank you =]
the female ghost of tom joad: lost rosseau winsjanie_tangerine on April 21st, 2008 08:42 pm (UTC)
There are quite some! I had to ditch at least six other characters but I couldn't get around to them ;) thanks, glad you liked them! I'm really satisfied with Danielle's ;)
Creature Of Hobbit: hearts and mindstellshannon815 on April 21st, 2008 10:11 pm (UTC)
Loved this, especially Shannon and Boone's!
the female ghost of tom joad: lost boone/shannonjanie_tangerine on April 22nd, 2008 03:25 pm (UTC)
THank you so much! Theirs are my favorites, too ;) ♥
twixcoffeecrisp7 on January 4th, 2009 06:33 pm (UTC)
Wow, these are all amazing, especially Juliet's. It's really moving, and rings so true... Ben in my opinion has made her do some things that I don't think flashback Juliet would ever have imagined doing... Ohh I love her so much, and this fic is just brilliant.
the female ghost of tom joad: lost jack/julietjanie_tangerine on January 4th, 2009 09:24 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked these! I think this drabble was the first time I wrote Juliet or something so I'm happy to hear it was IC. And I totally love her, too. ;) Thanks again!
Lou: lost - Claire OMGgottalovev on March 12th, 2009 03:00 pm (UTC)
okay. so.


how can you even suggest you are not good at drabbles? you are fantastic! they are awesome! *flails*

I loved them ALL. AAAAALLLLL.

*swears to never believe anything you say again* /kidding
the female ghost of tom joad: lost milesjanie_tangerine on March 12th, 2009 06:26 pm (UTC)
Oh wow. Thanks so, so, SO much. Because I'm still convinced I could improve a lot with the while drabbling thing but I trust your judgment! ;) Not to mention that I'm the worst judge of the stuff I do so you should take what I say with a grain of salt methinks... and THANKS AGAIN! You're totally too good to me. ♥
driver_85driver_85 on October 20th, 2012 07:54 pm (UTC)
I've read it just now, and I'm totally lost in it, it's great! Really love Shannon's and Boone's. This peace symbol impressed me much.